Wednesday, August 15, 2007

Three Word Wednesday






The rules, if you wanna call 'em that, are here.
Today's Words: Burning, Quietly, Taxi

Morning
Continuation of "Dreams"
She slipped into the back seat of the taxi, quietly bearing the burning toll the sun had exacted on her fair skin the previous day. Michelle’s eyes welled up as the cab pulled away from the curb.

Janice slept, murmuring quietly as she dreamed about something. A distant garbage truck whined. Wind chimes on the back porch stirred under a light sea breeze as birds slowly awakened to the twilight of another morning.

16 comments:

Paul said...

Economic yet very evocative. This wazs really good.

P.S. Can you tell me how to include a link in a commentary the way you did it on the 3WW site? Thanks.

liz said...

Very descriptive and can solidly stand alone even without "Dreams". :)

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

A lot said in a few words.

Rose

xo

paisley said...

well done... quick clean and concise...

gautami tripathy said...

Short and succinct!

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

I really enjoy your style of writing, I went back to Dreams, and will go back and read others...

Gay said...

Works very well on its own... Good job. (And as part of your story, it's even better).

Write From Karen said...

Such sadness in so few words. I wonder how Janice will react when she finds Michelle is gone.

Fledgling Poet said...

Two short paragraphs, but I most definitely am hooked and would like to know more about Michelle and Janice...:~)

pia said...

very very nice word poetry. I too would like to know more about the characters

Shelley said...

Goodbye, Michelle. Things have a way of working out. Trust Carlos.

Bunny ~N~ Early said...

That was way to short!

Bone said...

Ooo, so she's going to Tennessee? The story is unfolding nicely, Carlos.

Carlos said...

Wow! Thank you all for your wonderful comments. I do appreciate them very much! You're all way too kind.

Anonymous said...

Carlos, you are way too modest.

TC said...

You're going to continue this, right?

:)